Sentence of the Week #12

[From Michelle Yeoman:]

Editing Solution: Last Week’s Sentence

Welcome to the 12th installment in this series. As a reminder, below is Sentence of the Week #11:

            This new technique is more perfect than the traditional method.

The problem in this sentence is the phrase more perfect than, which should be better than (or an equivalent phrase). Thus, the corrected sentence can read as follows:

            This new technique is better than the traditional method.

Perfect means flawless and thus beyond improvement. If something is perfect, it cannot become more perfect. Because the new technique is an improvement from the traditional method, better is correct.

And now, onward to this week’s sentence.

Sentence of the Week #12:

The sentence below has 1 definite error:       

            The results of study suggest that vitamin D supplements can improve health.         

Please correct the error, and submit the corrected sentence and any remarks as a comment on this post. I plan to post and discuss the solution next week.

Do you have a sentence that you would like us to consider using as the Sentence of the Week? Please e-mail submissions to Michelle at msyeoman@gmail.com with the subject line “Sentence of the Week”. Submissions should be your own work—don’t nominate a colleague’s writing :). 

Please also feel free to e-mail suggestions relating to this series.